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⚔️Battle of the In-Laws (Elwing the White vs Idril Celebrindal poem exchange)

Idril Celebrindal

Exile of Gondolin
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Out of the presented options, Smeagol/Gollum I think would be funny, but it would probably be impractical. In a more serious choice, probably Aragorn.

Hmm, pretty much the opposite for me. I found the Shire to be absolutely beautiful, even if inside of a hobbit hole really isn't all that great of a place to live (the plumbing wasn't functional last I checked). Personally, I can't wait to leave the desert whenever I can (unless its camping). If I had an option other than the presented characters, probably Eowyn.
Oh people, do you say that the Desert is dead
That nothing stirs there on it's dry, sandy bed?
How can you say that! The Desert is alive as can be
The lizards under bushes breath just as well as you or me.
The snakes in the hollow also have hearts that beat
The gazelles on the dune crest are swift on their feet.
Scorpions are strong and fast
Camels long without water last
Falcon is hungry
Eagle is free
Mouse is fearful
Thirst is lethal
But how can you say that the Desert has no life?
It is there, strong and keen as as a knife.
You just have to look for it, for to find you must seek
The Desert breaths, be there no
lake or creek.

Not very good, perhaps, but that's the best I can do for now
 
Oh people, do you say that the Desert is dead
That nothing stirs there on it's dry, sandy bed?
How can you say that! The Desert is alive as can be
The lizards under bushes breath just as well as you or me.
The snakes in the hollow also have hearts that beat
The gazelles on the dune crest are swift on their feet.
Scorpions are strong and fast
Camels long without water last
Falcon is hungry
Eagle is free
Mouse is fearful
Thirst is lethal
But how can you say that the Desert has no life?
It is there, strong and keen as as a knife.
You just have to look for it, for to find you must seek
The Desert breaths, be there no
lake or creek.

Not very good, perhaps, but that's the best I can do for now
Here 'neath the evergreen tree,
I wondered at the fairness of things.
The souls of which are wild and free,
Here 'neath the evergreen tree.

Their sight guided them always west,
To witness the eons to come to rest.
Set on abiding as long as they might live to see,
As I watched from 'neath the evergreen tree

And as the dawn shone into the sky
The eagle opened its wings to fly
And no longer linger I, waiting for things to be
There 'neath the evergreen tree

Turns out I'm not very good at writing poems about forests or mountains. Oh, well, I tried. At least I hope you'll be able to recognize the symbolism behind it. Cool poem that you wrote, anyway.
 
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Here 'neath the evergreen tree,
I wondered at the fairness of things.
The souls of which are wild and free,
Here 'neath the evergreen tree.

Their sight guided them always west,
To witness the eons to come to rest.
Set on abiding as long as they might live to see,
As I watched from 'neath the evergreen tree

And as the dawn shone into the sky
The eagle opened its wings to fly
And no longer linger I, waiting for things to be
There 'neath the evergreen tree

Turns out I'm not very good at writing poems about forests or mountains. Oh, well, I tried. At least I hope you'll be able to recognize the symbolism behind it. Cool poem that you wrote, anyway.
That's really good, it took me a while to come up with a counter. Skahespeare I am not, but I hope you'll get the point of this one just as I think I got the implications in yours.

If each oister contained a pearl

And if oisters covered the floor of the sea

And if the sea was never stormy

Then the pearls would become pebbles

And men would not hunt for them in the depths

And they would not be treasured above aught else.

When life is in abundance

And there is mould under every rock

And the plants grow through the bricks

And rain falls in every season

And the streams are full of water

Then life is a pebble

In a stream of many.

Only in the places where life is rare

Where you must seek for it under every rock

And find only sand and dust and wind

Only in the Desert where every

Plant and creature and human yearns

For the fall of rain to fill the wadis

Where life is treasured above aught else

And every man hunts for it

Only in that sacred place

Will life become a pearl

That you find in death.
 
That's really good, it took me a while to come up with a counter. Skahespeare I am not, but I hope you'll get the point of this one just as I think I got the implications in yours.

If each oister contained a pearl

And if oisters covered the floor of the sea

And if the sea was never stormy

Then the pearls would become pebbles

And men would not hunt for them in the depths

And they would not be treasured above aught else.

When life is in abundance

And there is mould under every rock

And the plants grow through the bricks

And rain falls in every season

And the streams are full of water

Then life is a pebble

In a stream of many.

Only in the places where life is rare

Where you must seek for it under every rock

And find only sand and dust and wind

Only in the Desert where every

Plant and creature and human yearns

For the fall of rain to fill the wadis

Where life is treasured above aught else

And every man hunts for it

Only in that sacred place

Will life become a pearl

That you find in death.
Forward on, shall you pursue?
Depart from which you thought you knew?
Bear witness to the dawn's bright blooming?
Come to live, though time be dooming?

Whoops, looks like we sidetracked the subject of this thread a little bit....
 
Forward on, shall you pursue?
Depart from which you thought you knew?
Bear witness to the dawn's bright blooming?
Come to live, though time be dooming?

Whoops, looks like we sidetracked the subject of this thread a little bit....
Here is the next one, daughter-in-law.

An old man sat beneath a dune
His face was like an ancient rune
His flesh was old, his heart was young
About his waist a kinjal hung
His eyes were pearls in oister deep
His fiery spirit would never sleep
His skin was like a ghaf tree's bark
Within him shone an unquenchable spark
His hand could yet wield a blade
He had been part of many a raid.
His hair was matted with dust and sand
A pattern of veigns upon his hand
Upon his cheek a deep white scar
His eyes yet saw clear and far.
His soul was content, his mind was wise
He sat by the fire and watched the sunrise.
The shadows were dark, the fire burned bright
The sand yet held the coolness of night.
He sat beneath the windswept dune
His spirit sang an ancient tune.
A fierce wind came with the dawn
It swept away the pearls wan
It snuffed the spark, the spirit slept
Within his heart the old tune wept.
The sands of time swept him away
From the sky there fell a terrible rain.
The fire was quenched, the wind blew fey
And now the world is in disarray.
The spark is gone, the tune forgotten
Upon the dune a tower begotten.
One day the old man shall sit by the fire again
He shall take revenge on his wild kin.
Forget not the man with skin like bark
He shall return when there is no dark.
He shall come back when there is abundance of rain
When people have forgotten to the gift of pain.
Keep watch for him, remember the tune
Light the fire beneath the dune
Raze the tower, burn it's dust
Let it's foundations crumble to rust
Stand firm against the dawn wind
That you too may become a beduin.

I hope my poor rhyming doesn't make you spontaneously combust.
 
Here is the next one, daughter-in-law.

An old man sat beneath a dune
His face was like an ancient rune
His flesh was old, his heart was young
About his waist a kinjal hung
His eyes were pearls in oister deep
His fiery spirit would never sleep
His skin was like a ghaf tree's bark
Within him shone an unquenchable spark
His hand could yet wield a blade
He had been part of many a raid.
His hair was matted with dust and sand
A pattern of veigns upon his hand
Upon his cheek a deep white scar
His eyes yet saw clear and far.
His soul was content, his mind was wise
He sat by the fire and watched the sunrise.
The shadows were dark, the fire burned bright
The sand yet held the coolness of night.
He sat beneath the windswept dune
His spirit sang an ancient tune.
A fierce wind came with the dawn
It swept away the pearls wan
It snuffed the spark, the spirit slept
Within his heart the old tune wept.
The sands of time swept him away
From the sky there fell a terrible rain.
The fire was quenched, the wind blew fey
And now the world is in disarray.
The spark is gone, the tune forgotten
Upon the dune a tower begotten.
One day the old man shall sit by the fire again
He shall take revenge on his wild kin.
Forget not the man with skin like bark
He shall return when there is no dark.
He shall come back when there is abundance of rain
When people have forgotten to the gift of pain.
Keep watch for him, remember the tune
Light the fire beneath the dune
Raze the tower, burn it's dust
Let it's foundations crumble to rust
Stand firm against the dawn wind
That you too may become a beduin.

I hope my poor rhyming doesn't make you spontaneously combust.
Whoops, I didn't see this until now. That's quite a long poem you've got there!
Might not be able to reply very soon, I've been really busy recently and my weekend is going going be pretty occupied.
 
The Desert wins yet again (I'm not sure what that's supposed to mean either)!
I just wanted to let you know, I really like the symbolism that you put in your poems, and I really enjoyed reading them.
 

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