help with translation?

[natalya]

Hi!

I would really like to get some help with translating two phrases into Quenya. Have no experience with Quenya at all, but I tried using some dictionaries to translate it. CAn you please help me or at least check how my translation look like?

Life is simple. You make choices and you never look back. (That's what I want to have but due to lack of some words my translation is a lil different, tho still has the same meaning... hopefully)
---> Coivië ná (or ëa) uhranga. Carilyë cilmei ar lá lumissen nanelailyë.

 

[Elhath]

2nd person subject (-lyë) would certainly be understood by all English-speaking readers of Neo-Quenya, but it would be more idiomatic for a Quenya-type language (e.g., Finnish) to use a 3rd person subject for these "explanatory assertion" type phrases.

Trying to find a translation for "never" can also be averted here IMHO.


Mo/Quén carë (i) cilmi ar ua tirë cana.

or perhaps rather

Orë mon carë (i) cilmi ar lau titíra cana. "One is to [= should, orë] make (the) choices and not keep glancing [frequentative verb] behind-wards."


(compare the struck-out entry nattire and other ways to translate "to look" in Tolkien's late notes published in PE17)